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Thursday, October 6, 2016
Thursday Tips: vivid language
Welcome to another Thursday tip day! Today we will talking about vivid language. Our job as a writer is to paint the picture in the readers mind so they can see your story unfold before their eyes. Vivid language is very important to descriptive writing.
Let’s look at the sentence:
"I took a trip to the mountains."
Does this paint a picture for your reader? Assuming that the reader has ever seen a mountain, the reader is able to somewhat visualize what you meant. However, the picture the reader has may be very different from what you actually mean. After all, there are many different types of mountains.
Is this one better?
"My last trip was to the quaint mountain village of Helen, Georgia located in the foothills of the evergreen Appalachian mountain range."
Does this paint a more clear picture for the reader?
How about this one?
"I visited the snow-capped peaks of the Canadian Rocky mountains, where I stayed at a skiing resort."
Does this paint a clear picture? Is it different from the image evoked from the first example?
There are many different types of mountains. Just saying that you took a trip to the mountains is not sufficient to paint a clear picture of your experience to the reader. Vivid language consists of the descriptive adjectives that bring your experience to life for the reader.
Remember when describing something look at what you have written and see if the words are sufficient to put your reader in the moment with you.